MarioWiki:Featured articles/Unfeature/N2/Dimentio

Dimentio

Remove Featured Article Status

1. GreenDisaster (talk) Simply put, the writing is abominable. It tries far, far, far too hard to be like a synopsis for a story and not an article for a wiki. This should definitely not be the case. Our articles are meant to inform people, and this article isn't able to inform with all of the unnecessarily fancy wording that jumbles the actual information. Let me just quote some of the absolute worst ones: "He learns that Bleck has an emotional side, and this could be used as a weakness to make it easier for the heroes to defeat him", "He needs a time and place, however, where this deception wouldn't be discovered", "The Pure Heart Mario acquired in this land is powerless against the destruction, but it could be repaired in the Underwhere", and plenty of others. I'm not saying that the article has to be "Dimentio did this and then did that, the end", but the way it is now, it's just too overly gaudy to be able to represent "the best of the best that the Super Mario Wiki has produced".
2. ThePremiumYoshi (talk) - Per the wall of text above.
3. BabyLuigiOnFire (talk) This is why I put a rewrite template on Count Bleck's article, which is suffering the same fate as this article.
4. Electrical Bowser jr. (talk) Per GD.
5. YoshiFan1200 (talk) Per GreenDisaster.
6. King Pikante (talk) Per GreenDisaster.
7. SuperYoshiBros (talk) Per all. This article could basically be alternatively titled "Super Paper Mario" considering the content.
8. Bowser Jr. 735 (talk) Per all.

Keep Featured Article Status

1. Mario4Ever (talk) I feel as though the issues which led to the article's unfeaturing have been resolved and that any issues the article may have are not severe enough to justify unfeaturing the article.

Comments

I went through and cut out a lot of unnecessary and redundant information. The offending section is still long, but it's a lot better than it was. Feedback would be appreciated. Mario4Ever (talk)

While it's certainly better, it's still quite... offending. There are still plenty of sentences that are unnecessarily elaborate, and the infobox has a quite awkward place on my screen, squished between two images. It's a great start, but there are still a few more miles until the end. Also, I thought we weren't allowed to use signatures on FA nomination articles? GreenDisaster (talk)

I fixed the infobox. For my screen, it's normal. YoshiFan1200 (talk)

The policy says that all Featured Article pages observe the No-Signature Policy (this probably counts as such a page, so to be safe, I modified the signature). Anyway, I'll probably go through again and make more changes tomorrow. I kind of figured this wouldn't be done in a single night. Mario4Ever (talk)

Ok, so I went back through and reworded sentences I thought were unnecessarily elaborate. If there are any I missed, please let me know. Mario4Ever (talk)

I still think the article needs a bit of trimming. I don't think the word "murder," "death", and "killing" should ever be used in a Mario-related article here. The general information needs some more scrutiny; I don't think Super Paper Mario is that dark. The article is better than before, but it still needs to remove those heavy loaded words. 173.55.155.46 16:54, 9 March 2013 (EST)