MarioWiki:Featured articles/N1/Pinna Park

Pinna Park

Support

1. KS3 (talk) This is a great article with a minimal amount of errors and lots of pics.
2. Mr bones (talk)
3. Commander Code-8 (talk)

Oppose

1. Bloc Partier (talk) -- The article has poor, immature writing. It's all simple sentences and simple word choice. Plus, the images all need captions.

Comments

What's wrong with simple sentences? What if a whole article was written something like this: Pinna Park at this point in time is an amusement park due to the fact that it has a ferris wheel in the middle of the park. At a later date all of a sudden, Bowser Jr. makes use of ElectroKoopas to take in possession of the the park due to the fact during that time there is no doubt but that Mario is going to take Bowser Jr. into defeat, owing to the fact that Mario is in possession with E Gadd's new innovation, the FLUDD, until such time as Bowser Jr. made an escape. Okay, I know that's is not how it goes, but my, isn't that easy to comprehend?LeftyGreenMario (talk)

Well, if you took that from the article, the problem is that the sentences are not so great. There are a few comma mistakes just in that quote. I guess the simple sentences part is a bit harsh, but I still see room for sentence improvement. There are mistakes, unclear statements, and very dull language. For an article to be featured, it has to be the best of the best; without better word choice, this article is not in the best of the best. Bloc Partier (talk)

I wasn't intending to write good sentences. I just wanted to make up the stringiest sentence possible so you can see that simple sentences are better than these types of sentences (I don't see any comma errors anyway). This article is not very exciting to read, though; I agree with you on dull sentences. LeftyGreenMario (talk)