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#{{User|LeftyGreenMario}} You did a good job of removing the melodramatic parts. I still see some heavy-loaded words in the article, though, which is still unacceptable to keep it featured, so I think you need to push a little harder to remove the story-telling words in the article. | #{{User|LeftyGreenMario}} You did a good job of removing the melodramatic parts. I still see some heavy-loaded words in the article, though, which is still unacceptable to keep it featured, so I think you need to push a little harder to remove the story-telling words in the article. | ||
#{{User|GreenDisaster}} I have to agree with LGM here. Your rewrite is a good start, but it's only a start. As LGM has mentioned, the general writing style is still rather mediocre. | #{{User|GreenDisaster}} I have to agree with LGM here. Your rewrite is a good start, but it's only a start. As LGM has mentioned, the general writing style is still rather mediocre. | ||
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