MarioWiki:Featured articles/Unfeature/N1/Honeyhive Galaxy

Remove Featured Article Status

 * 1) It has the "wrong verb tense" template on it, and that is against the rules for a FA.
 * 2) It has a rewrite template now...
 * 3) Although I have indeed fixed all of the tense errors, the excessive use of demonstratives ("there are, there is") is a major problem. What it does is that bores the reader if used too much. Also, there are a bunch of capitalization errors (I'm not sure if mandibug is supposed to be lower-cased, and shouldn't the names of the planets also be lower-cased?) that I stumbled across and did my best to correct them, but there's still quite a notorious amount of them. Bottom line: proof-read articles before you feature them!
 * 4) The writing just doesn't have the quality compared to other featured articles. Sometimes, we have to look how interesting the article is to read. This article has plenty of boring verbs. I know this isn't a narrative or something similar, but I believe phrases such as "there are" are too numerous in this article. I fixed up a bunch of errors, but I think the article still doesn't have that quality.

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 * 1) - Problems solved

Fawfulfury65

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Fawfulfury, you're supposed to add a reason for unfeature nominations. If this is a feature nomination, yeah, it's allowed.

Wait, how come this article does not show up on this page under "FAs Proposed for Unfeaturing"?

65: There is no tense template. Instead, we have a blue one.

I'll fix the demonstratives thing.

It seems as if the verb tense template was changed to a different rewrite template, but still, that's against the rules.

All problems have been solved. It was written terribly